The Marvels - Quick Re-write

• Start the film 20-something years ago with a crazy Bond-like opening set piece (think the Casino Royal Madagascar parkour/embassy sequence but in space) that includes Captain Marvel destroying the Supreme intelligence in a thrillingly brutal and bombastic fight sequence on Hala (don’t reveal the aftermath/consequences yet)… We really needed to be shown how Carol destroying the supreme intelligence was a major event, the story hinges on this.

• Cap off the prologue 20-something years later with the Kree finding the Quantum band.

• Change Dar-Benn’s name to ‘Hala the Accuser’ - Her title as the ruler and self-proclaimed saviour of Hala, she’s a big fucking deal.

• Hala the Accuser is the daughter of Ronan the Accuser. This pays off Ronan’s unresolved role in the first film but more importantly gives her a more interesting history, context and motivation (instead of just being a random Kree who we know nothing about).

• Mid 2nd act: Hala the Accuser reveals what happened after the destruction of the Supreme Intelligence and how she led her father’s authoritarian faction to victory in a devastating 20 year civil war, at a great cost to the planet and it’s sun. Show this all as a big flash back, instead of just briefly mentioning it, as it is very important information. This is the big revelation of the film, it’s what Carol has been running/hiding from and explains both Carol’s and Hala’s motivations

• Replace the singing planet with the Shi’ar empire’s home world, Chandilar. They are an amusing mix of fiercely serious/militant, yet aesthetically flamboyant (in an 80’s/90’s comic book kind of way). Introduce Princess Lilandra & Gladiator who equip ’The Marvels’ with their new battle suits and fight off the Kree’s assault, along with the Shi’ar Imperial Guard.

• Hala the Accuser survives opening in the incursion point, albeit heavily injured, The Shi’ar imprison her on Chandilar.

• Give Danvers a more pronounced character arc ie - she feels tremendous haunting guilt for causing the Kree civil war (even though destroying the supreme intelligence was ultimately the right thing to do), she’s lived with it for over 20 crushing years, the shame of it is why she wants to work alone, she has to contend with the fact that she only knows how to destroy. She’s resigned to thinking of herself as just ‘a weapon’ (echoing Ronan’s words)… This would make the realisation that she can reignite Hala’s dying sun a cathartic moment of growth for the character in that she can do more than just destroy and is willing to risk her life to do it, even though Kamala begs her not to go out of fear. Also tie this into the fact that it took Monica to figure this out, which makes Carol realise how things are better when you are not alone.

• Carol is heavily injured as a result of reigniting Hala's sun, she wakes up in a SABER medical bay with Kamala by her side - This adds some much need vulnerability to Carol, we need to see that she's not completely invincible and it makes her decision to help the Planet Hala all the more selfless.

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